October
25
100 Word Challenge- Week 7
As Elias and I were walking downtown, little did I know that we were passing by the proprietors of the shops surrounding us. I could tell from the prevasive screams; people were scaring others and pranking them. Elias was really scared and started screaming all over the place and I told him to slow down and be more concise on what he wanted to tell me. I’m guessing he was too scared to tell me because as the door slammed, I knew that he had left me all alone. I sat down and patiently waited for him to calm down.
Great job using the vocabulary words correctly; however, you misspelled pervasive. You used first person well and have a good story.
Is the door slamming in one of the shops or did Elias slam it?
No, the wind slammed it. I’ll be more clear next time=)
Hi Salma,
You have used some great words in your writing. Did you use a thesaurus at all (online or book)?
The words I used were words from our vocabulary.